Take backs from Division Contest

I walked into the room of 60 people and presented my revised Contest Speech.
Result came out that I was not place but nevertheless, the lessons learned were massive.

Here are the key lessons:

1) End your speech with confidence (after giving the speech, the way I walked out of the speaking areas is important as the judge had not cast a vote yet. So, if I walked out and show sign of uncertainty and I missed something, that will give the judges a second thoughts)

2) Position the same person/furniture at the same spot

3) Perhaps... the topic on relationship (guys getting girls and girls getting guys) are too common topic and easy to build laughter). Use more original topic

4) Start with a premise or foundational phrase with less than 10 words and build story and humor around it

5) Enunciation and voice articulation/projection to the end of the room

My strengths are:

1) Open with question that build rapport

Original: "Have you ever try to impressed a girl?"
Revised: "If I were to ask you... have you ever try to impress a girl? or a man? I bet you'll say yes!"

2) Bring audience to the scene and use a different character to communicate the message instead of yourself to build creditability

Revised: If you were to sit next to my mum at the comfy black leather couch, with chocolate chip cookies baking behind the scene, you'll have heard her say something that changes your life. I know it changes mine. She says... "Kian, ......"

3) Use metaphorical items to convey your speech message
Jessica = Goal, Mission and Dream
"What a loser" = challenges, obstacles and judgment that separate us and our dream

I'll post my revised Contest speech in the next posting.

Cheers,
Kian